... situation Writing "suffer from pain and agony" is like writing "suffering from suffering and suffering" The writer could change this to "living in pain and agony" or "experiencing pain and agony" ... "when I am doing something" Also, "something" is too vague The writer could improve it by changing it to "when I am trying to accomplish something" or "when I have a difficult task to f...
... look at a sample paraphrase of the passage This sample paraphrase has several key problems Read the paraphrase and then write in the box the left some of the problems with this paraphrase Four ... (Adam Khutorsky, "Immigrants Adapting") "The undermining of self, of a woman’s sense of her right to occupy space and walk freely in the world, is deeply relevant to education The capaci...